I often have writers ask me which person
they should write in, first, second or third.
Deciding if a story should be told with "I said,
you said or he/she said" can be daunting to
many writers.
There are pros and cons to each person. Let
me give you some examples so we are all
talking about the same thing.
This example comes from a short story of
mine called First Blood.
Third Person, also called Omniscient
(This
is how it was written for publication.)
"Damn them all to the seven hells of
Anthion," Klempf yelled, as he took another
direct hit. His head throbbed from being
thrown against the control panel. A small
trickle of red blood ran down between his
blond eyebrows.
Second Person
"Damn them all to the seven hells of
Anthion," you yelled, as your ship took
another direct hit. Your head throbbed from
being thrown against the control panel. A
small trickle of red blood ran down between
your blond eyebrows.
First Person
"Damn them all to the seven hells of
Anthion," I yelled, as my ship took another
direct hit. My head throbbed from being
thrown against the control panel. A small
trickle of red blood ran down between my
blond eyebrows.
As you can see, each paragraph has a
distinctly different flavor.
Second person is very seldom used in
fiction. To me, it seems to be paternal and
distancing when someone keeps saying,
"You, you, you."
It lacks involvement of the
characters in the story. Don't get me wrong,
it can be used in a story, but it must be done
very carefully.
The most frequently used persons are first
and third.
First person has the advantage of being very
personal. "I did this. I did that." The reader
will know exactly what the character is
thinking and what they believe, even if the
story shows the character is wrong.
One of
the disadvantages is that the reader doesn't
know anything that the character doesn't
know. If a character is standing in one room,
he doesn't know what is happening
anywhere else.
You couldn't say, "Darek
stood in the living room, unaware that Jim
was in the garden, with a rifle aimed at
Darek's chest." That would be third person.
Now you could say, "I stood in the living
room facing the bay window. A glint of light
from something in the garden caught my
attention. Too late, I realized the glint came
from a rifle scope, the bullet ripped into my
chest, and the world darkened."
This would
have to be the end of the story, because there
wouldn't be anyone left to tell the story,
unless you have the character's ghost
continue the story.
With first person you must be very careful to
stay in each characters head and know only
what they know. This can be expanded if
you jump from one person to another.
However, you must be sure that the readers
know whose head you're in. It's easy to
confuse the reader, and just a little too much
of this will have your reader lost, frustrated
and putting your book on the shelf forever.
Third person is the easiest to use; at least
that's what many writers, including myself,
think. Third person allows you to know
everything.
That's why it's also called the
omniscient view. You are like a god, and
know everything that everyone in the story
knows, plus everything going on in their
universe.
If you want the reader to know that
Jim is in the garden with a gun, you can just
say so. You don't need Jim to shoot, or have
someone else see Jim. It allows you to paint
your story with a much broader brush.
A good writer can, with a lot of work,
combine these different views, but it must be
done just right and for a reason. I suggest
staying with one view throughout a story,
just to make things easier on you, and the
reader.
Find out what voice you like to write in. Do
what I did above.
Write two or three pages
of a story in each person, and see which you
enjoy the most, and which sounds most
natural to you. Which person you choose
may even vary from story to story.
So go out and write. Whatever person you
choose to write in is up to you, just be sure
to write.
Jeff Colburn is a freelance writer who specializes in business writing, articles and genre fiction. His books, The Writer's Dictionary Of Science Fiction, Fantasy, Horror and Mythology and
The Youngest Ninja, can be purchased from his site, The Creative Cauldron.
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